Crazy Times in the Summer
Two weeks ago Dante finished his Junior year in high school. He is currently on summer vacation. He was planning on having an awesome summer and partaking in many pleasurable activities but has not really done anything so far. Dante was fired from the job he had so he decided to just enjoy the summer since he made so much money the year before. Since he was not working or doing anything exciting his parents became very upset with him for not being active. His friends also kept asking where he had been because they had not seen him at any parties or anywhere. Dante was just in the mood to sit around and watch TV and play video games. Dante was a coach potato and all of his peers had had enough of it.
One night in July Dante had a terrible nightmare. He dreamt that it was the week before school started and he had wasted away his whole summer. Suddenly Dante woke up to complete cave-like darkness in his room with the dark red glow of the numbers reading 12:00 on his clock. Dante decided right then he would stop being so lethargic and would accept every invitation or idea to do something exciting. Dante called his friend Alfonzo and whispered to him through the phone. Dante started off the conversation with an apology for not responding to any texts and then eventually asked him if anything was “going down that night”. Alfonzo informed Dante that this girl Latifa was having a party while her parents were out. Dante snuck out of his house to drive and pick up Alfonzo. It was quite easy for Dante to sneak out since his parents’ room is on the other side of the house. Ten minutes after sneaking out Dante arrived at Alfonzo’s house. Dante made sure to turn out his car lights off to not attract any neighbors. Alfonzo greeted Dante with “ Yo, Wassup man, how you been?”. Alfonzo and Dante drove down to Latifa’s house. As they were driving by there were blue and red light illuminating Latifa’s driveway. Alfonzo said, “ oh shoot the police, man did we get lucky”. After the drove home Dante decided to go to bed, and that he had had long enough of a night. He would probably never sneak out like that again because he almost got in a lot of trouble.
The next day Dante’s other close friend, Fanizzi, called him early in the morning. He told Dante that he was leaving for his beach house with some friends that day, and wanted to know if he wanted to spend the weekend with them. Dante did not really get along with the kids that Fanizzi was bringing but decided to go anyway. After Dante asked his parents and they agreed he quickly packed his clothes. When Dante pulled up into Fanizzi’s driveway he saw a group of people packing up the car. It was Fanizzi’s parents, Fanizzi, Alfonzo, and three other private school kids that were kind of weird. By the time everyone had packed all of their stuff it was about noon time and then they got going on the road. The car ride to Fanizzi’s house was very quiet because the three private school kids just sat in the back of the car and didn’t really say anything. As they approached the beach area they noticed that it was more crowded than usually. They drove through the sandy streets of the beach town until they eventually arrived at Fanizzi’s house. They pulled up to a house that could be considered a mansion, no one even knew that Fanizzi was that rich. Once the get settled the all put on their bathing suits and walked down to the beach.
When they got there it was very crowded, they saw people out in the ocean jet skiing and swimming and doing all sorts of fun activities. While they were there Alfonzo and Dante went to the pizza place on the boardwalk while the private school kids and Fanizzi went swimming. Before they knew it nightfall had come and they had no plans. So they went around the boardwalk and met a whole bunch of people that wanted to hang out. Fanizzi agreed that he would have a party because his house was perfect for that.
Around 8 o’clock at night a lot of people started to show up. A lot of them no one knew. The party started to get really good and everyone was having a great time. However later in the night people began to get a little out of hand. No one was respecting Fanizzi’s house and a lot of furniture and other objects were breaking. Fanizzi and his friends began to get really scared. They asked everyone to leave at 12 but know one even listened. As Dante was going in the kitchen he saw kids playing around with axe bottles and lighters and making flame throwers with them. A flame eventually went into the can and the axe can exploded. This causes the drapes to catch on fire. Fanizzi, Dante, and Alfonzo tried to put the fire out on their own but evgentually had to call the fire department. Since they were underage the fire department called their parents and all of them got in a lot of trouble for having an unsupervised party. Dante learned that being a coach potato was probably better than getting into a whole bunch of trouble. So for the rest of the summer Dante just sat around and relaxed.
Thursday, May 28, 2009
Friday, May 22, 2009
Point of View Change Page 117 ( Elliot's Point of View)
"They might call me", I said to Mrs. Sen. “ But they might complain that you were making too much noise.”
From where I sat on the sofa I could detect her curious scent of mothballs and cumin, and I could see the perfectly scented part in her braided hair, which was shaded with crushed vermilion and therefore appeared to be blushing. At first I had wondered if she had cut her scalp, or if something had bitten her there. But then one day I saw her standing before the bathroom mirror, solemnly applying, with the head of a thumbtack, a fresh stroke of scarlet powder, which she stored in a small jam jar. A few grains of the powder fell onto the bridge of her nose as she used the thumbtack to stamp a dot above her eyebrows. “ I must wear the powder every day,” she explained to me when I asked her what it was for, “ for the rest of the days that I ma married.”
“Like a wedding ring, you mean?”
“Exactly Eliot, exactly like a wedding ring. Only with no fear of losing it in the dishwasher.”
By the time my mother had arrived at twenty past six, Mrs. Sen always made sure all evidence of her chopping was disposed of. The blade was scrubbed, rinsed, dried, folded, and stowed away in a cupboard with the aid of a step latter. With my help the newspapers were crushed with all the peels and seeds and skins inside them. Brimming bowls and colanders lined the countertops, spices and pastes were measured and blended, and eventually a collection of broths simmered over periwinkle flames on the stove. It was merely dinner for Mrs. Sen, as indicated by the two plates and two glasses she set, without napkins or silverware, on the square Formica table at one end of the living room.
From where I sat on the sofa I could detect her curious scent of mothballs and cumin, and I could see the perfectly scented part in her braided hair, which was shaded with crushed vermilion and therefore appeared to be blushing. At first I had wondered if she had cut her scalp, or if something had bitten her there. But then one day I saw her standing before the bathroom mirror, solemnly applying, with the head of a thumbtack, a fresh stroke of scarlet powder, which she stored in a small jam jar. A few grains of the powder fell onto the bridge of her nose as she used the thumbtack to stamp a dot above her eyebrows. “ I must wear the powder every day,” she explained to me when I asked her what it was for, “ for the rest of the days that I ma married.”
“Like a wedding ring, you mean?”
“Exactly Eliot, exactly like a wedding ring. Only with no fear of losing it in the dishwasher.”
By the time my mother had arrived at twenty past six, Mrs. Sen always made sure all evidence of her chopping was disposed of. The blade was scrubbed, rinsed, dried, folded, and stowed away in a cupboard with the aid of a step latter. With my help the newspapers were crushed with all the peels and seeds and skins inside them. Brimming bowls and colanders lined the countertops, spices and pastes were measured and blended, and eventually a collection of broths simmered over periwinkle flames on the stove. It was merely dinner for Mrs. Sen, as indicated by the two plates and two glasses she set, without napkins or silverware, on the square Formica table at one end of the living room.
Thursday, May 14, 2009
Summer Vacation Final Draft
Summer Vacation
Summer vacation is the best time of the year. It is my personal favorite time of the year as it is for most high school teenagers. Summer for many people is a time to relax and enjoy themselves. It is a time to make some money and to have fun at the same time. Some people, however, become busier in the summer with sports and summer school. For me, summer is the time to do whatever I want whenever I want and enjoy my freedom. I am always in a better mood during the summer; there is no stress with school and I just love the warm weather.
In the summer time, I work as a lifeguard at Beachcomber Swim Club. Last year I was a substitute lifeguard, but this year I have a full time position. I love working at Beachcomber because many of my good friends work there too. I actually have fun while I am at work which is great. My mom always said, “The best job is the one you can enjoy”.
This year Beachcomber is under new ownership which is good and bad at the same time. Lifeguards hours have been extended. Our breaks have been shortened and we will work 8 hours a day which is a lot more than last year. This means more money but less free time. Hopefully Beachcomber will be as enjoyable as last year; I will have to see. I am nervous coming into the summer season. I am sure that it will be very fun but I am still anxious to see the outcome of the summer. I really hope I get along with the new owner, Mr. Bill Berardelli. I will be meeting him this Saturday and I want to make a good impression. Last year, working at Beachcomber was awesome because the owners were very laid back and I had an awesome time. I enjoyed going to work because I got to spend a lot time with my friends and hang out even though we were working hard at the same time.
Hanging out with friends is obviously the best part of summer. Summer is the time to party and relax as much as you can. Summer is the resting period in the year to catch up on time for fun and sleep that was missed during the school year. I look at summer as a giant celebration of successfully completing the school year. Although I spend a lot of time with friends, I do not see as many different people during the summer as I do in school. I meet a lot of new people in school while I usually just spend time with my close friends in the summer. I try to spend as much time away from the house as I can, unless I am having friends over. It is not to get away from my parents; I just do this because I see my parents so much during the school year. I feel much more independent in the summer by doing whatever I want. I love to spend time with my parents but I feel that I need to go out on my own in the summer.
A great part about this time in the year is hanging out by the pool with friends. I love pool parties and I spend about 90 percent of my time in the summer by a pool. Although my favorite thing is going to the beach, I still enjoy relaxing by the pool, which is why I work at one. I am a swimmer and I am in an indoor pool all year long; however, there is something about outdoor pools in the summer that makes them so much more enjoyable. It is such a great feeling to sunbathe by the pool and listen to great music; it is the most relaxing thing I have ever done.
In conclusion, summer is definitely my favorite time of the year. Without this amazing season I believe that I would actually be a less happy person. There would be nothing to look forward to for the end of the school year if there were no summer break. The freedom and fun that summer offers is just astonishing. I am counting down the days this year for summer because I am so excited for a three- month long celebration of the completion of another school year.
Refection:
If you have read both of my blogs of theme 7 you can see that a lot as been changed in many different ways. I huge difference is that I read over and made sure that every sentence made sense. I had a lot of grammar issues in my previous rough draft but now I believe they are all fixed up. I did not have a huge amount of issues with my focus in my rough draft. I basically kept all of the same ideas but just ordered them differently and added some new ones.
My organization has greatly improved in this revised version of theme # 7. Before i had just a huge jumble of ideas that i seemed to spit out of know where. In this final draft they are all organized into paragraphs with other relating ideas in that paragraph.
My style also improved by making it more fun and easy to read.
The structure of my writing also improved a lot. It is better organized into nice paragraphs and looks very good.
My conventions improved some what also. I had many spelling and grammatical errors that cause the theme to not make any sense, but now that all of that is fixed, it makes a lot more sense now.
Summer vacation is the best time of the year. It is my personal favorite time of the year as it is for most high school teenagers. Summer for many people is a time to relax and enjoy themselves. It is a time to make some money and to have fun at the same time. Some people, however, become busier in the summer with sports and summer school. For me, summer is the time to do whatever I want whenever I want and enjoy my freedom. I am always in a better mood during the summer; there is no stress with school and I just love the warm weather.
In the summer time, I work as a lifeguard at Beachcomber Swim Club. Last year I was a substitute lifeguard, but this year I have a full time position. I love working at Beachcomber because many of my good friends work there too. I actually have fun while I am at work which is great. My mom always said, “The best job is the one you can enjoy”.
This year Beachcomber is under new ownership which is good and bad at the same time. Lifeguards hours have been extended. Our breaks have been shortened and we will work 8 hours a day which is a lot more than last year. This means more money but less free time. Hopefully Beachcomber will be as enjoyable as last year; I will have to see. I am nervous coming into the summer season. I am sure that it will be very fun but I am still anxious to see the outcome of the summer. I really hope I get along with the new owner, Mr. Bill Berardelli. I will be meeting him this Saturday and I want to make a good impression. Last year, working at Beachcomber was awesome because the owners were very laid back and I had an awesome time. I enjoyed going to work because I got to spend a lot time with my friends and hang out even though we were working hard at the same time.
Hanging out with friends is obviously the best part of summer. Summer is the time to party and relax as much as you can. Summer is the resting period in the year to catch up on time for fun and sleep that was missed during the school year. I look at summer as a giant celebration of successfully completing the school year. Although I spend a lot of time with friends, I do not see as many different people during the summer as I do in school. I meet a lot of new people in school while I usually just spend time with my close friends in the summer. I try to spend as much time away from the house as I can, unless I am having friends over. It is not to get away from my parents; I just do this because I see my parents so much during the school year. I feel much more independent in the summer by doing whatever I want. I love to spend time with my parents but I feel that I need to go out on my own in the summer.
A great part about this time in the year is hanging out by the pool with friends. I love pool parties and I spend about 90 percent of my time in the summer by a pool. Although my favorite thing is going to the beach, I still enjoy relaxing by the pool, which is why I work at one. I am a swimmer and I am in an indoor pool all year long; however, there is something about outdoor pools in the summer that makes them so much more enjoyable. It is such a great feeling to sunbathe by the pool and listen to great music; it is the most relaxing thing I have ever done.
In conclusion, summer is definitely my favorite time of the year. Without this amazing season I believe that I would actually be a less happy person. There would be nothing to look forward to for the end of the school year if there were no summer break. The freedom and fun that summer offers is just astonishing. I am counting down the days this year for summer because I am so excited for a three- month long celebration of the completion of another school year.
Refection:
If you have read both of my blogs of theme 7 you can see that a lot as been changed in many different ways. I huge difference is that I read over and made sure that every sentence made sense. I had a lot of grammar issues in my previous rough draft but now I believe they are all fixed up. I did not have a huge amount of issues with my focus in my rough draft. I basically kept all of the same ideas but just ordered them differently and added some new ones.
My organization has greatly improved in this revised version of theme # 7. Before i had just a huge jumble of ideas that i seemed to spit out of know where. In this final draft they are all organized into paragraphs with other relating ideas in that paragraph.
My style also improved by making it more fun and easy to read.
The structure of my writing also improved a lot. It is better organized into nice paragraphs and looks very good.
My conventions improved some what also. I had many spelling and grammatical errors that cause the theme to not make any sense, but now that all of that is fixed, it makes a lot more sense now.
Thursday, May 7, 2009
Summer Vacation
Summer Vacation
Summer vacation is the best time of the year. It is my personal favorite time of the year as it is for most high school kids. Summer for a large amount of people is a time to relax and have fun. It is a time to make some money and to have a good time at the same time. Some people however become busier in the summer with sports and summer school but that is a very small amount of people. For me, summer is the time to do whatever I want whenever I want and take as much freedom as I can.
In the summer time I work as a lifeguard at Beachcomber. Last year I was only a sub lifeguard but this year I have a full time job. I love working at beachcomber because I large amount of my good friends work there. I actually have fun while I am at work which is great because my mom always said, “the best job is the one you can enjoy”. This year Beachcomber is under new ownership which is good and bad at the same time. Although the lifeguards will not get as long of breaks we will make a lot more money. Another change to Beachcomber is that we will work 8 hours a day which is a lot more than last year, which means more money but less free time to do outside of work. Hopefully Beachcomber will be as enjoyable as last year, I will have to see.
Hanging out with friends is obviously the best time of summer. Summer is the time to party and relax as much as you can. Summer is the resting period to catch up time for fun and sleep from the school year, which is why they call it break. I look at summer as a giant celebration of successfully completing the school year before in the summer I try and spend as much time away from the house as I can, unless I am having friends over. It is not to get away from my parents; I just do this because I see my parents so much during the school year.
A great part about this awesome time in the year is hanging out by the pool with friends. I love pool parties and I spend about 90 percent of my time in the summer by a pool. Since the best thing is going to the beach in the summer I settle for relaxing by the pool which is why I work at one. Although I am a swimmer and I am in an indoor pool all year long, there is something about outdoor pools in the summer that makes them so much more enjoyable.
In conclusion summer is obviously my favorite time of the year for many reasons. Without this amazing season I believe that I would actually be a less happy person. There would be nothing to look forward to for the end of the school year if there was no summer break. The freedom and fun that summer has is just amazing. I am counting down the days this year for summer because I am so excited.
Summer vacation is the best time of the year. It is my personal favorite time of the year as it is for most high school kids. Summer for a large amount of people is a time to relax and have fun. It is a time to make some money and to have a good time at the same time. Some people however become busier in the summer with sports and summer school but that is a very small amount of people. For me, summer is the time to do whatever I want whenever I want and take as much freedom as I can.
In the summer time I work as a lifeguard at Beachcomber. Last year I was only a sub lifeguard but this year I have a full time job. I love working at beachcomber because I large amount of my good friends work there. I actually have fun while I am at work which is great because my mom always said, “the best job is the one you can enjoy”. This year Beachcomber is under new ownership which is good and bad at the same time. Although the lifeguards will not get as long of breaks we will make a lot more money. Another change to Beachcomber is that we will work 8 hours a day which is a lot more than last year, which means more money but less free time to do outside of work. Hopefully Beachcomber will be as enjoyable as last year, I will have to see.
Hanging out with friends is obviously the best time of summer. Summer is the time to party and relax as much as you can. Summer is the resting period to catch up time for fun and sleep from the school year, which is why they call it break. I look at summer as a giant celebration of successfully completing the school year before in the summer I try and spend as much time away from the house as I can, unless I am having friends over. It is not to get away from my parents; I just do this because I see my parents so much during the school year.
A great part about this awesome time in the year is hanging out by the pool with friends. I love pool parties and I spend about 90 percent of my time in the summer by a pool. Since the best thing is going to the beach in the summer I settle for relaxing by the pool which is why I work at one. Although I am a swimmer and I am in an indoor pool all year long, there is something about outdoor pools in the summer that makes them so much more enjoyable.
In conclusion summer is obviously my favorite time of the year for many reasons. Without this amazing season I believe that I would actually be a less happy person. There would be nothing to look forward to for the end of the school year if there was no summer break. The freedom and fun that summer has is just amazing. I am counting down the days this year for summer because I am so excited.
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