Summer Vacation Final Draft

Summer Vacation
Summer vacation is the best time of the year. It is my personal favorite time of the year as it is for most high school teenagers. Summer for many people is a time to relax and enjoy themselves. It is a time to make some money and to have fun at the same time. Some people, however, become busier in the summer with sports and summer school. For me, summer is the time to do whatever I want whenever I want and enjoy my freedom. I am always in a better mood during the summer; there is no stress with school and I just love the warm weather.
In the summer time, I work as a lifeguard at Beachcomber Swim Club. Last year I was a substitute lifeguard, but this year I have a full time position. I love working at Beachcomber because many of my good friends work there too. I actually have fun while I am at work which is great. My mom always said, “The best job is the one you can enjoy”.
This year Beachcomber is under new ownership which is good and bad at the same time. Lifeguards hours have been extended. Our breaks have been shortened and we will work 8 hours a day which is a lot more than last year. This means more money but less free time. Hopefully Beachcomber will be as enjoyable as last year; I will have to see. I am nervous coming into the summer season. I am sure that it will be very fun but I am still anxious to see the outcome of the summer. I really hope I get along with the new owner, Mr. Bill Berardelli. I will be meeting him this Saturday and I want to make a good impression. Last year, working at Beachcomber was awesome because the owners were very laid back and I had an awesome time. I enjoyed going to work because I got to spend a lot time with my friends and hang out even though we were working hard at the same time.
Hanging out with friends is obviously the best part of summer. Summer is the time to party and relax as much as you can. Summer is the resting period in the year to catch up on time for fun and sleep that was missed during the school year. I look at summer as a giant celebration of successfully completing the school year. Although I spend a lot of time with friends, I do not see as many different people during the summer as I do in school. I meet a lot of new people in school while I usually just spend time with my close friends in the summer. I try to spend as much time away from the house as I can, unless I am having friends over. It is not to get away from my parents; I just do this because I see my parents so much during the school year. I feel much more independent in the summer by doing whatever I want. I love to spend time with my parents but I feel that I need to go out on my own in the summer.
A great part about this time in the year is hanging out by the pool with friends. I love pool parties and I spend about 90 percent of my time in the summer by a pool. Although my favorite thing is going to the beach, I still enjoy relaxing by the pool, which is why I work at one. I am a swimmer and I am in an indoor pool all year long; however, there is something about outdoor pools in the summer that makes them so much more enjoyable. It is such a great feeling to sunbathe by the pool and listen to great music; it is the most relaxing thing I have ever done.
In conclusion, summer is definitely my favorite time of the year. Without this amazing season I believe that I would actually be a less happy person. There would be nothing to look forward to for the end of the school year if there were no summer break. The freedom and fun that summer offers is just astonishing. I am counting down the days this year for summer because I am so excited for a three- month long celebration of the completion of another school year.

Refection:

If you have read both of my blogs of theme 7 you can see that a lot as been changed in many different ways. I huge difference is that I read over and made sure that every sentence made sense. I had a lot of grammar issues in my previous rough draft but now I believe they are all fixed up. I did not have a huge amount of issues with my focus in my rough draft. I basically kept all of the same ideas but just ordered them differently and added some new ones.

My organization has greatly improved in this revised version of theme # 7. Before i had just a huge jumble of ideas that i seemed to spit out of know where. In this final draft they are all organized into paragraphs with other relating ideas in that paragraph.

My style also improved by making it more fun and easy to read.

The structure of my writing also improved a lot. It is better organized into nice paragraphs and looks very good.

My conventions improved some what also. I had many spelling and grammatical errors that cause the theme to not make any sense, but now that all of that is fixed, it makes a lot more sense now.